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A Nod to Punctuation

  She’ll pick him an asterisk or a comma or two; full stops, ideas tied off in neat packages, have always eluded his dialogue, circumvented an outcome. . Her dreams have become dangling participles, unfinished pages with Schubert’s flavour, unable to hold hyphen’s place – waiting, always waiting, a watched pot that never boils. .…

poppy seedhead

 

She’ll pick him an asterisk

or a comma or two; full

stops, ideas tied off in

neat packages, have always

eluded his dialogue,

circumvented an outcome.

.

Her dreams have become dangling

participles, unfinished

pages with Schubert’s flavour,

unable to hold hyphen’s

place – waiting, always waiting,

a watched pot that never boils.

.

Phrases, nuances, shadings

of meaning get bogged down, dragged

through the spittle of run-on

sentences; she slams the door

on the argument, her shoes

leaving angry editing

marks on the stairs. Period.

 

Responses to “A Nod to Punctuation”

  1. godspoetbychoice

    Your creative ability is like the heavens on a clear summer night, endless!

    1. melodylowes

      Why, thank you! 🙂 I truly see it as a gift handed to me by a good God – and so I use it, and seek to improve and challenge it, and learn to expand my horizons with practice.

  2. Gallivanta

    But what is that asterisk you found in your garden?

    1. melodylowes

      The top of a poppy seed head – neat, isn’t it?

      1. Gallivanta

        Very neat!!!

  3. RoSy

    Clever!

    1. melodylowes

      🙂 Thanks Rosy!

  4. lylekrahn

    Well I think you hit a whole new level on this one. Had to read it three times.

    1. melodylowes

      I’m hoping that’s a good thing… 🙂

      1. lylekrahn

        You have to understand that I don’t watch movies again unless then are exceptional.

      2. melodylowes

        Then I will consider it an honour to have been re-viewed. 😀

  5. bennetta faire

    WOW, lots of good stuff here, Mel–I relate too well to “her dreams have become dangling participles”; and yes, I think the “run on sentences” are familiar too.

    1. melodylowes

      It can be so frustrating to be cross-referenced instead of above-board… Sheesh and 5 1/2 halves…

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