edges bleed

silver linings

when fingers are

free to touch the stars;


edges build

diamond pillars

when vision breaks

loose beyond the scars.

11 comments on “Jagged

  1. Eric says:

    Liked the look of this poem. But we definitely need to send some global warming your way before you turn into a big creamsicle! ๐Ÿ˜‰

  2. Genie says:

    Profound poem.

  3. Caddo Veil says:

    I’m totally captivated by the first half, Melody–and am seeing it at the beginning of a book…it’s startlingly good, and full of hope.

    • melodylowes says:

      Aw, thanks so much. Any ideas for the second half, then??

      • Caddo Veil says:

        I wondered if I should say more than I did–whether you might think my phrasing reflected negatively on the 2nd half. That wasn’t my intent–I only felt that the first part was so incisive that it stands alone. And I had an immediate vision of it on the page before a book’s story opens…does that help at all?

      • melodylowes says:

        I just thought you may have had ideas to make it stronger. I’m not the least bit offended – just interested in honing my craft, getting editorial comments from someone whose opinions I trust. I think I’m ready to start getting more serious about my writing… What do you think?

      • Caddo Veil says:

        Oooh, go for it, Mel–you know I’m behind you ALL the way!!!

  4. Debbie says:

    Another one that give me hope, Melody! Thank you and God bless you!

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